I broke away from my family and off the hiking trail. There was a girl of about ten, her summer dress billowing up as she twirled like a ballerina. As I got close, she ran away, then stopped to be sure I followed. She led me to the abandoned building made of brick and concrete. We went inside the broken structure, up the concrete steps, and to the second floor. She led me to a room, empty except for trash scattered all over the floor, and the pile of bones in the corner. Giggling, the girl twirled again and disappeared.

© Josslyn Rae Turner
Photo by J. Hardy Carroll

Part of the Friday Fictioneers Challenge. For more information go to: https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2016/04/06/8-april-2016/

 

19 thoughts on “Ghost Dancer

  1. Dear Josslyn,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. Not sure if this is closure for the girl or the end for the one who broke away from the family. At any rate you left the reader wanting to know more. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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      1. No problem with that, it’s tough out there! I used ‘dude’ but had no idea really if it was a boy, girl, adult or child. Rather glad it was a kid though, I don’t want to think of what business an adult would have following a kid into an abandoned building! 🙂

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  2. It felt like a dream sequence to me. At first I thought the narrator was ageless, but then I went back and read it again. Breaking away from the family narrowed it down a bit. And yes, that billowing dress was a nice touch.

    It was so nice visiting with you, Josslyn.

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